Can you help me with my cover letter?
Asked by ThinkClearWater
This is the job i want to apply for Hitachi America, Ltd., located in Tarrytown, NY, has a one year contract, entry level, Procurement Engineer position available. The main purpose of this position is to manage procurement activities related to international power projects. Duties include managing suppliers and equipment/service contracts; providing engineering support and coordination, preparing commercial documents, reports and procurement cash flows; expediting and oveseeing engineering, QA, logistics, contract execution; negotiating contract terms and conditions; promoting supplier relations and assisting in the development of internal procedures and protocol. Must have a B.S. in Mechanical, Electrical or Civil Engineering. Summer or intern experience in power or industrial fields preferred. AutoCAD, Microsoft Office skills essential to position. Must be able to read and understand engineering drawings and documents. and documents. Strong written and verbal communication abilities important. Must be willing to work in a multi-cultural environment. The cover letter I have is My purpose in writing this cover letter is to apply for the position listed on craigslist.org. I have good and effective written and communication skills along with my calm , professional and efficient ways . I have excellent understanding of Microsoft excel and word and has successfully completed certain courses in Electrical Engineering. I have served in similar positions for other companies as listed on my resume. I am able to ensure the smooth and efficient handling of information by keying in text, entering data into a computer, operating a variety of office machines, and performing other clerical duties. I have a thorough understanding of all the requirements necessary for a successful job , and my organizational ability allows me to complete my assignments well within the acceptable time frame. My extensive experience working as a Customer Service Representative ( Call - Center ) at E-Z Pass center in New York, has helped me learn analytical and quality assurance skills and also helped me with improving my organizational and multi-tasking skills . Enclosed is a copy of my resume that details my professional office skills and strengths which are complemented by a positive , can-do attitude, excellent listening skills , and my commitment to quality and accuracy. Please call me on my cell phone, so we can arrange a date and time that suits you. Thanks so much for considering me for this job and for reading my cover letter. Sincerely, Which part of my cover letter should I change so I can apply for this job ? Please help , I Will appreciate this help Forever !!

Best Answer:
Do not start a cover letter with explaination that it is a cover letter...they know that 's what it is so get rid of that part Say... I am applying for the position of whatever the title was do not say what was listed on craigs list...they could have many listings and don't know what your'sis from that. I would like to apply for the position of whatever. I have experience in electrical engineering as I have stated in my resume and I am sure to be a benefit to your organization. I am knowledgeable in Microsoft excel and word and have successfully completed certain courses in Electrical Engineering. I am able to ensure the smooth and efficient handling of information by entering data, operating a variety of office machines, and performing other clerical duties. I have a thorough understanding of all the requirements necessary for this position.I'm organized, efficient and posses a good ethic. My extensive experience working as a Customer Service Representative in New York, has helped me learn analytical and quality assurance skills and also helped me with improving my organizational and multi-tasking skills . My resume details my professional office skills and strengths which are complemented by a positive , can-do attitude, excellent listening skills , and my commitment to quality and accuracy. Please contact me via my cell phone to arrange a interview at your convienience. Thank you so much for considering me for this position and I look forward to hearing from you soon. Sincerely,
I hope this helps you...you could tweek it abit more to tighten it up.
Answered by gr8ful_one

A cover letter should be short, sweet, and focused. " I am interested in a challenging and responsible position in your firm..." " I have a BS in ____Eng'g and experience in this field. I am familiar with AutoCAD and MS Office.." Good luck
Answered by red riter