Whats wrong with this resume?
Asked by Misty T
MANAGMENT SALES,TECH,NETWORKING CALL CENTER, AND GENERAL OFFICE, HELPDESK OBJECTIVE "To obtain a challenging position in management/General Office that would best utilize my experience in the sales retail computer IT and office skills. "Environment. This position should have many opportunities for an aggressive, dedicated individual with the problem "Solving, leadership, and organizational skills needed to advance. PROFESSIONAL HISTORY Current Employer Tiger direct Business Account Manager Business to business Sales Meeting sales goals Prospecting Client's Taking in/outgoing calls in a call center office setting. Faxing quotes daily to clients. Merchants Tire and Auto 3-2008/ "-Constant clear and concise communication with employees and management. "-Analyzing problems and developing solutions within an appropriate time frame. "-Performing services within the specified Just Tires Service Technician 2-2007/3-2008 "Constant clear and concise communication with employees and management. "-Analyzing problems and developing solutions within an appropriate time frame. "-Performing services within the specified CompUSA Inc. Raleigh, NC (December 05 - November 06) Technical Services Manager "Opening and closing store responsibilities, including cash management for a multi-million dollar store "maintaining Profit & Loss statements for the entire technical services department "Hiring, scheduling, training, and managing a team of 8-11 associates "Ordering, sourcing parts, and communicating with multiple vendors "Communicating and appropriately handling all customer issues, finding solutions to every problem "Motivating sales, upgrades, and all other technical services in order to maximize profit and sales "Providing support for all store staff and equipment Staples Office Supply Wake Forest/Cary, NC (October 03 -November 05) Electronics Lead / Key Holder / Manager-in-Training "Opening and closing store responsibilities, including cash management "Keeps sales team motivated and assures employees that they are valuable members of the Electronics team "Responsible for training and coaching associates' behaviors to ensure maximum sales "Reports to sales and general manager weekly numbers of planned sales and budget Accomplishments " As of May 2005, was the only employee to sell a Mobile Technology Plan " Acknowledged by several customers for exceptional service to corporate office " Exceeded corporate projected sales by over 50% during 2004 fiscal year " Maintained in the top 3 stores in the district for sales of Cable, Ink, Paper and Service plans (CIPS) Accelerated Language Academy Raleigh, NC (Jan 03 - July 06) "Network Designer/Administrator and Graphic Design Artist/OFFICE EXPERENCE "Answered in/outgoing phone calls "Signed in new clients "Maintained in/outgoing faxes "Handled in/outgoing Mail "Filed all documents in office "Designed and installed computer network "Made visits to maintain and upkeep network/servers "Designed advertisements and brochures to increase involvement in the academy "OFFICE ENVIRONMENT Accomplishments " Handled network troubleshooting for eleven computers " Customized network to fit customers needs with minimal problems COMPUTER SKILLS "Microsoft Windows XP, Win 2K, Win NT, Win 98 SE, Win 95, DOS, Linux "Microsoft Office 2003 Professional (Word, Excel, PowerPoint, Outlook, Publisher) "Photoshop 7.0 Illustrator AS400 Symantec Products "Panda Internet Security McAfee Products Lotus Notes "Symantec Ghost "Acronis "Configure "Linux/server EDUCATION "ECPI Technical College Raleigh A+ Certification (Pending) May-June 2005 "Wilfred Laurier University Kitchner, Ontario September 2001-December 2002

Best Answer:
The first, most obvious, problem is all the mistakes in grammar and sentence structure; this will put off potential employers. Ask someone to correct your use of grammar. Also, the two extra objectives seem superfluous and a bit pushy: "should". And, most importantly, a resume should be written for a specific job application in mind. This one seems to be too general. Depending on the place you live, there are a lot of government funded services that will assist you with writing a good resume. I would make use of those, if I were you. Also, visit the library and read a good modern book on resume writing. I am not an expert, but I do have a lot of experience in writing resumes, and this one shows some fundamental problems.